![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Which is why I haven't been able to shoot a short since. The PSM and DP left two weeks before shooting, but I was told by people on here back then to shoot the project anyway, so the rest of the cast did not think I was a flake. I didn't mean for that to be the final ending, I just didn't get it done, and tried to cut the story to make sense and conclude, the best I could. The actors have moved on and we all just want to do other projects, including me. Try and iron out the weird inconstancies (why does the hero have facial hair in one scene and then not in the next?) and get some proper sound work done, especially on the latter half. ![]() My advice: If you want to ever release this short, re-do the first half, making it briefer and more visually interesting. Violence against women is a sensitive topic and you portray it about as sensitively as battery acid, but I guess that you set out to produce something shocking and you've pretty much succeeded. The ending is sick, as I assume it was intended to be. That stuff is genuinely good work- the sex scene is brutal and well shot, although I sort of wish you'd help a couple of the shots for longer rather than mixing it up so much. The best bit of the film (and further evidence of how much it needs sound and music work) is when you flashback, with the dialogue and sound design muted, and just let the music washover. I think you know that the strikes with the baseball bat are unconvincing, but, all in all, it's a pretty well-directed scene. The knife in the head moment made me squirm (even though I'd seen that bit before and knew it was coming). The break-in scene needs a lot of sound work- and music will really help to heighten the tension- but in terms of fight choreography, it's quite brutal. That said, you really come into your own as a director (and an actor) in the second half. The dramatic walk-out of the lawyer's office is so camp that it looks like it might've come from a pantomime. The younger actor (you?) seems to be struggling to appear realistic, and, as a result, the performance becomes very unbelievable. The dialogue is unclear and somewhat stilted. It exacerbates the weaknesses and draws attention to things that might otherwise go unnoticed. I know that you hadn't done any work on the sound, or done a score for the majority of it, but, as a result, parts were unwatchable. If ever there was an example of how important sound is- here we go. Ok, I've just spent 13 minutes watching, so here's my feedback: I felt dirty, kinda guilty, and loved every minute of it! It's like I finally had sex with my friend's kinda-hot mom. If you don't want to show it to anybody, stop talking about it! By constantly talking about his project, and constantly asking questions about how to make it better, without ever letting us see it, he's like a filmmaking dick-tease, and we've all got filmmaking blue-balls. We've taken to talking about him in the third person, which would normally be really rude, but I'm pretty sure he just skims past it.Īlthough I agree with Nick's point that H44 is under no obligation to show us anything, he's rather asshole-y to all of us. He's really good at pretending he never read it. In fact, he ignores the overwhelming majority of any advice that has ever been given to him here. But he ignores that, and chooses not to post any footage. Invariably, our response would be something along the lines of "well, I'm not entirely sure what it is your describing, why don't you post some footage?". Most of the time, when we've asked to see his footage, it's been because he was asking a question about something he'd shot. I assure you, we've asked, and asked, and asked, and asked, and asked. In the context of this thread, I can see how you'd think that. ![]()
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